Reiko
Scout In Training
And I'll love you forever
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Post by Reiko on May 6, 2004 17:08:25 GMT -5
Well, here goes nothing! Tell me what you think.
Swaying Stars
I set out in search of my dream on that road where the stars pointed east. I left my friends to wait for me at the start of this road where you must walk past the waterfall to reach. I can still hear their murmuring. Whispering behind my back, and now the cold wind is blowing. I always wanted to become someone. You never thought I could do it. I seem to be blinking back the tears. Why have the stars changed position? Don't bother looking for me. I'll be walking on this twisted road and crossing over again. I don't expect to return. I already lost my way...
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DiamondsMoonGrl
Chibi Scout
True love is Prince Diamond and Me, Princess Serenity SO back off MY Diamond!!
Posts: 65
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Post by DiamondsMoonGrl on May 25, 2004 15:54:57 GMT -5
great! please look at mine!
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Reiko
Scout In Training
And I'll love you forever
Posts: 33
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Post by Reiko on May 25, 2004 16:08:41 GMT -5
great! please look at mine! Thank you. ^-^ I'll be sure to check out yours.
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Cancer_Star
Sailor Scout
Few know me for who I truely am, but in the end all shall face me
Posts: 130
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Post by Cancer_Star on Sept 29, 2004 22:09:04 GMT -5
Very nice, good wording. But try to find the flow of the words and lines a little more, it will make your work go so far.
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