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Post by RAPTOR 9:48 on Nov 9, 2004 12:24:51 GMT -5
a fanfic I've been rewriting, I hope ya'll like it. be careful, I've rated it R to NC-18 due to a chapter having an extremely lemon point. this is one of my light to darkest works yet, please dont give negative reviews. my fanfic works best without censorship.
RonchukaMOONdai: chapter 1 "the missing Charmander?"
*a bright day in Tokyo as like any other, we follow one Kino Makoto, AKA Sailor Jupiter as she walks from her appartment. she runs into a friend, one Aino Minako, AKA Sailor Venus.*
Makoto: hi Minako-chan.*smiles*
Minako: hi Mako-chan, a little late arent you? *playful gesture*
*Mako-chan blushes and turns her eyes to a cake she is carrying, Minako looks to it as well with a slight glitter in her eye*
Minako: is that... ?
Makoto: I got up extra early to make it.
Minako: I hope you made more, or it'll be gone before we get to Rei's.
Makoto: dont worry, I packed plenty.*pointing behind her, showing her backpack has a number of baked goods*
Minako: wow... *glittery eyed and slight drool* so much to eat... so little time...
Makoto: we have to hurry while the food is still hot.
Minako: right! lets get Ami-chan.*smirk*
Makoto: no pranks! eversince you got that DVD Lions guide to ultimate pranks you've become as bad as the joker.
Minako: I have not!*pout*
Makoto: *sigh* lets not argue and just get ami.
*the two girls walk over to the dwellings of Dr. Mizuno Ami, AKA Sailor Mercury. Ami is about to open her front door until greeted by a sudden scream, this startles the young doctor and makes her throw her glasses into the air which land back on her face. Ami adjusts her glasses and turns expecting a fight, but only sees her friends with appologetic expressions on their faces.*
Ami: you scared the crap out of me! I had 5 motorcycle victims today, 2 with ripped open legs, and 3 screaming victims with a stop sign attatched to their kidneys! it took us 8 hours from my night to put them all back together... sorry, I havent slept yet.
Minako: I can tell. c'mon, we're going to Rei's.
Ami: okay, just let me put my books away...
*Ami puts her books away inside and dresses casual, then steps outside.*
Ami: ready!*perky smile*
*the three Senshi were on their way to the Hikawa Shrine when they saw a group of children poking and swatting an unseen creature, it's hurtful cries were nearly silent. Mako-chan hands her backpack to Minako and her cake to Ami, and yells at the top of her lungs rolling up her sleves*
Makoto: HEY! STOP THAT!! GO ON! GIT!!
*the children run scared of the tall brunette and the small creature is curled into a small ball with a few bruises, she picks up the small red ball and feels it shaking*
Makoto: are you okay?*looking concerned*
*before any of the senshi react, the small ball unrolls to be a small charmander, blood ruby red skin, heavenly golden belly, platinum nails, and shimmering saphire eyes. the small creature slightly curled gives a weak and scared char cry trembling with fear.*
Makoto: you poor thing... *looks around and notices the cake in Ami's hands* I know!
*Mako-chan sets the small charmander on the ground and takes a bit of the cake she made, and holds it in front of the small charmander. it cautiously approches the offered food expecting it to be cruelly pulled away, it takes a few sniffs, then begins eating. after eating the whole slice, he looks a little happier, with a hop and a small char cry as a sign of thanks, it looks at Mako almost asking for more.*
Makoto: you want more huh?
Charmander: *happily* char! *shut eyed smile*
Makoto: okay! c'mon little one.
*Mako-chan picks up the small reptile and the group finds their way to the hikawa shrine. Usagi and Rei having their usual rasberry war, and Mamouru looking like he barely survived a 10 year war. the girls say their hellos and before anything further can be said...*
Usagi: why is a peice of cake missing?
*before Mako-chan can answer her question, the small creature jumps off her head, and onto the table.*
Charmander: Char!*smiles*
Rei: DEMON!!
*Rei dives for the charmander with a talisman ready, but before she can get within striking distance she finds herself on the logs end of a defensive flamethrower*
Rei: *cough* dragon... *flop*
what happens next? I'll write that as a reply. see ya.
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Post by Moon Princess on Nov 9, 2004 12:32:45 GMT -5
Cool so far
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Post by RAPTOR 9:48 on Nov 17, 2004 9:05:17 GMT -5
*Rei lays burned from the shoulders up, and the little Charmander wags it's short tail happily*
Makoto: bad...
Charmander: Charmander?
Makoto: right! bad charmander! you burnt rei.
*Charmander slumps and looks ready to cry*
Makoto: awwwwww... *picks up charmander* it's okay.
*Mako-chan cuddles the charmander appologetically and the little pokemon perks up happily*
Usagi: why is there a peice of cake missing!?*anime wobbly eyes*
Makoto: oh! I fed it to this little guy. isnt it cute?
Charmander: char char!*smile*
Usagi: awww, it's so cute!
*Usagi's high pitched squeal-like sound frightened charmander and he ducks his head into Mako-chans breast*
Makoto: aww, the little guy is just shy. it's okay, Usa-chan wont hurt you.
Charmander: char?
Ami: hmmm... I think I should do a check up.
Makoto: you might scare it.
Ami: well, it's owner should be able to know it's gender, but we should find out it's physichal condition ourselves, it's my duty as a doctor!*lens flare off her glasses*
Minako: you need to lighten up.
Ami: oh? hows about e take this little one to Setsunas? she probably knows who owns this little one?
Usagi: Yay!
Rei: my grandpa would just flirt with girls if I left, so I'm not going.
Charmander: Char?
Rei: BACK AWAY!!*backing up*
*charmander steps outside the shrine and sees Reis grandfather preparing for more flirting, and sneaks up on the old man*
Charmander: char...*smirk*
*Reis grandfather finishes planning and turns to feel something pulling on his baggy shinto preist pants, in his surprise he sees a small lizard with red skin looking up to him with a smile*
Gramps: and who do you belong too... huh?
*as if on instinct Reis grandfather went into attack mode and charged after the little charmander, he catches up and slaps a sutra talisman to Charmanders forehead, but instead of paralasys, Charmander got really angry. the inner Senshi all about to pull charmander out of harms way see Reis grandfather running like a bat out of hell, and he should considering a pissed off charmander blasting fire behind him*
Gramps: HELP! I'M TOO OLD FOR THIS!!
*Charmander leaps into the air like a velociraptor in lost world and takes the old man down, then blasts him with flamethrower, and continues as if roaring in victory. in his rage he didnt notice Mako-chan tear the sutra off his head, and the little reptile returns to normal.*
Charmander: char?
Rei: well, since my grandfather is disabled, I think youchirou should be able to handle the duties while I'm gone.*smirk* I mean, that little dragon came in handy after all.
*now that rei is amoung the travelers, the inner senshi make their way to the dwellings of one Meiou Setsuna, AKA Sailor Pluto. we next see them all gathered in a large room with a casual table, all the girls sit down, and Ami prepares to give a check up.*
Ami: okay now, lets check you out.
*charmander does not respond to Ami as she tries to examine the little guy.*
Ami: come on little one, how am I supposed to know how healthy you are if I dont...
*suddenly one Tenou Haruka, AKA Sailor Uranus hands Ami a nurses uniform*
Ami: I told you Haruka, NO!
Haruka: I'm not asking for... that. just put it on, maybe a change of clothes will help.
*this seems to catch the nerves of Kaiou Michiru, AKA Sailor Neptune, and she prepares to wail on her lover Haruka, before she can, Charmander hops up happily identifying the nurses outfit, Chibi Usa seems to be earing the same thing, and readies for a physichal*
Ami: maybe that outfit will help... but I'm not doing any stupid dances!
*Ami changes clothes and blushing quite a bit, she readies to give charmander a physichal*
Ami: okay now, open wide.
*Charmander opens his little mouth qhich seems to open quite large, showing his teeth, and a long dark path in his neck*
Ami: wow, I never saw this far before... lets check some more. reflexes please.
*charmander sits with his tiny legs hanging from the table, being held by Mako-chan, Ami gently taps his knee, and he flips instead of kicking*
Ami: how adorable...
Haruka: are you done yet?
*Harukas lack of patience almost earns her a whack upside the head, but gets a flamethrower to the face instead, apparently this charmander doesnt like being interrupted as much as Ami.*
Charmander: MANDER!! (shut up!!)
Ami: Domo Arigotto, lets continue... *pulls out a thermometer* temperature check.
*Ami checks Charmanders temperature and sees the digital read out explode, Charmander giggles appologetically and scratches the back of his head.*
Ami: oh dear... heart?
*Charmander raises his arms and Ami puts the stethescope to his chest, hearing quite a strong heart beating like a drum, Charmander giggles because her stethescope tickles his tiny chest*
Ami: that sounds... healthy...
*Charmander turns nervously raising his tiny tail expecting something, Ami knows what this means, and blushes a little more.*
Ami: oh no, I wont be checking for colon cancer on you.*waves*
Charmander: *sigh of releif*
*charmander turns back around and notices Ami pull out a muscular measuring tool, but before she can check, Setsuna inteveins*
Setsuna: if you want to know, that one is male. *to charmander* yes you are.
*her finger touches charmanders nose gently and he hops happily*
*SAVE POINT*
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Post by Moon Princess on Nov 17, 2004 11:11:59 GMT -5
lol that was funny I liked the bit where charmander flamethrower's Rei's grandpa ;D
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Post by RAPTOR 9:48 on Nov 23, 2004 19:50:58 GMT -5
*Setsuna continues tickleing the charmander making it laugh and squirm, suddenly, the alarm in Mako-chans watch goes off, she picks up the boxed cake, and readies to run, but the cute charmander hops on her head*
Makoto: oh no, you're not comming with me. I have an admirer to meet.
Charmander: char?
*Mako-chan sees into it's bright saphire eyes, and sighs*
Makoto: fine, you can come, but you're my pet.
Charmander: CHAR?!
*Mako-chan rushes out in a hurry without further conversation, and no sooner did Mako-chan leave Setsunas property, did a large man pull up on a huge motorcycle that resembled a Velociraptor. the large bike pulls up to the front door, and the helmeted man knocks, almost accidentally taking the door off the hinges*
Setsuna: I'll get it, it is my house.
*Setsuna answers the door, and sees a tall muscular man with long raspberry chocolate hair before her, looming ominously, she cant help but blush*
Setsuna: may... I... help... you?
???: yes, I'm looking for my little buddy.
Setsuna: okay... please describe your little buddy...
???: he has ruby red skin, a heavenly golden belly, platinum claws and teeth, and big beautiful saphire eyes. need any more information?
Setsuna: uhhhhhmmmm....
???: he's an eight inch charmander, he's still a baby eventhough I've had him for some years, we got seperated during a brawl with some street punks.
Setsuna: who were these punks?
???: some idiot saying something about "spirit detective", and his idiot friend, I kicked both their asses, the dumb one knocked my charmander away, he's too adorable to be resisted, and he calls me daddy.
Setsuna:.... oh! my friend came running to the train station to meet someone.
???: where?!
Setsuna: the Tokyo train station, the bullet train should be arriving soon.
???: bad move goin alone!! I'm on my way!! *hands setsuna a card* if she comes back with my charmander before I get there, or she goes home, call her place, then call me! big bad news with a capitol "W" is commin up!!
*the mysterious man bolts to his bike, hops on, and revs the engine, which is remarkably SILENT, with a quiet humming sound, he turns with his helmet on...*
???: thanks, and you can call me Peter.
*Peter hauls away quickly from Setsunas, jumping his bike over Setsunas gates. later, Mako-chan is sitting at the train station, with the cute charmander on her lap, wearing a puppy collar, charmander wrestles with the collar and falls over many times, Mako-chan just laughs playfully*
Makoto: you're following an allabi, you're my pet until we find your owner.
Charmander: CHAR CHAR!!
Makoto: you're so cute!*smiles*
*Mako-chan waits for some time, the sky looks a little less inviting, and charmander runs to get away from impending rainfall, Mako-chan follows after him, sitting on a more sheilded bench, after some rainfall, Mako-chan brings charmander back to the outside, and sits patiently, with only charmander putting a smile on her face. behind her, a familiar face from her past sneaks up behind her, plotting a quick murder, this guy seriously snapped!*
punk 1: (thats it! one quick slit! then she's gone, and 3 more left!)
*outside the station, a motorcycle pulls up, and the driver hops off quickly, wearing some durable looking clothing. inside, the thug gets closer, and closer, just as he raises his knife, he is interrupted with a hard robot-like grip on his right arm, and is thrown back as if by a silverback gorilla with the strength of 50 of itself. Mako-chan turns to see whats going on, and sees 3 punks, and her unknown hero. Mako-chan stands ready for battle, but notices the weapons*
Peter: names Peter! GET DOWN! THEY'RE ARMED!
*a fight begins, Peter reaches one arm out, and yells at the top of his lungs*
Peter: CHARMANDER! PYRO BULLET!!
*Charmander finally takes the collar off, and jumps into Peters hand, readies flame wheel, and Peter throws charmander like throwing a bomb, Charmanders firey attack causes an explosion, and knocks the punks away long enough for Peter to retreive charmander*
Peter: good work, we got a lead, now keep an eye on her!
Charmander: mander char char!*smiles very happily*
Peter: now then, which of you punks wants it first?
punk 1: you're dead!!
punk 2: oh no, he's mine!
punk 3: I got him!
Peter: more than enough of me for 5,000 of you f**ks! BRING IT ON!!
*the second and third punk charge, Peter grabs the third punk by the ankles and starts swinging him like a sledge hammer and with the first swing, peter screams the name of the attack*
Peter: C.B. SLEDGE!!
*Peter continues until kicking the smashed punk into a concrete support beam, cracking it, and the punks bones with it! then he throws his opponent turned weapon into a trash bin*
Peter: takin out the trash B*-AAAAATCH!!
*the lead punk charges with a knife drawn, and nearly cuts Peter, the exchange continues of swing and dodge, until Peter is sliced along his left cheek facial scar. this agitates him, and he catches the blade on the next swing, then crushed it, as if crushing play-doh. then punches the lead punk asside*
Peter: asshole!*takes blood off his face* damn! my face is bleeding! always my face scar! try the chect one for once! or the one along my spine!
Punk1: you son of a bitch!
*Peter wipes more blood from his wound, and growls, the punk charges. Peter kicks the punk in the jaw, sending him into the air,jumps into the air himself , then kicks his foe about 20 times hard in the spine without losing altitude, turning his foe to face the impending kick to the face. Peter stop kicks his opponent in the face, then upon return to the ground, Peter does a hard ninja kick to the stomache, and a double stomp for good measure.*
Peter: *heavy breathing followed by hard coughing* and stay down!! jerk...
*the lead punk rises to his feet with two guns, Peter turns to face his foe, but meets 8 beretta bullets to his chest, then recives a full blast of a shotgun to the stomache, sending him reeling 20 feet! Mako-chan screams terrified, and Charmander stands ready to fight on*
punk 1: get up boys, he's dead! I got him...
Peter: ow... that f**kin sucked... you son of a b*tch, you'll pay... thats $500 in cleaners you sh*t head!
*OH SH*T!! Peter isnt down, the bullets fall, as do the buckshot balls, with no damage to the jacket, Peter stands up to full height, angry now, with soot all over the front of his jacket*
Peter: this is a $4000 dollar armor jacket f**k-head!!
punk 1: *screams* YOU'RE DEAD!! YOU CANT GET UP!!
Peter: my jacket is imune.
*save point*
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Post by RAPTOR 9:48 on Dec 21, 2004 13:33:23 GMT -5
*Peter dusts off his jacket with quite a mean look on his face, the dust is stubborn enough, and now taking out his sunglasses, and slips them on*
Peter: two options d*ck face, option A: you pay for the cleaning of my jacket, you leave this girl alone, and I forget having to beat the f*ck outa you...
*Peter pauses a moment, noticing his would-have-been executioner is paralyzed with fear*
Peter: options B: I powerbomb you into the concrete, and stomp you into submission... skip the stomping.
*Peter dashes forward with ninja-like speed and kiks his foe in the stomache hard, bending him downward. Peter prepares the punk for a powerbomb, putting his head under his hip, then flipping the punk into a sitting position, then slams him into the concrete only 3 times, the third time is released, the concrete slightly cracked, Peter stands victorious, and drops a small cap-like thing into each punks mouth*
Peter: there, now you punks should be able to admit your wrong-doings after retaining consiousness, and recovering enough to get up under your own strength.
Makoto: what the hell was that!?
Peter: oh thank you madame, I cant thank you enough.
Makoto: what the hell are you talking about?! I just saw the most brutal display of violence in my life, and you're thanking me for watching?!
Peter: hell no, I'm thanking you for finding my charmander.
Makoto: huh?
*Peter is reunited with his little reptillian firey companion, and calls it back into his ball*
Peter: I cant tell you how much the little guy means ta me, especially since I hatched him myself.
Makoto: uh....( wow, he looks BETTER than my old boyfriend)
Peter: why thank you.
Makoto: ACK!*covers her cheeks with her head glowing bright red*
Peter: sorry, sorry, I randomly read minds, hardly controllable.
Makoto: uh... *still blushing* right... mappens all the time...
*after some time, the two got to know eachother, and Mako-chan brings the man who saved her life to Setsunas mansion, after some breif introductions, and a few surprises, the Senshi now know a man they deem as Mako-chans boyfriend*
Haruka: okay c*ck, what can you offer Mako?
Peter: that was very rude of you, just because you're a lesbian, doesnt give you the right to be rude.
Michiru: very true, you owe him an appology.
Haruka: no!
*before Michiru can stare a glare, Mako floors Haruka with a punch to Harukas abdomen*
Peter: nice punch. I'd like to try that some time.
Makoto: she doesnt like men that much, especially Americans.
Peter: how'd you know I was born in the USA?
*the senshi stumble with words and Ami comes with a conclusion*
Ami: sounds simple when you think about it. you're not Japanese, and you're quite tall, and your clothes are eccentric compared to ours, so I assume you're an American.
Peter: ah, well blame the weirdos I met in my travels, they made me look funny.
*SAVE POINT*
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